In post 115, xofelf wrote:xyzzy, you're amazing. Your last two sentences have been killer.
thank you! that's kind of you to say. my general approach to my sentences was that each one should feel like either the first or last sentence in a chain -- the first sentence is never a laundry list of precise details, and the last sentence doesn't bear the burden of being the thing someone else will use to draw a picture, which makes jumping to conclusions about what you're looking at a lot easier. describing what you see in the most literal sense is a lot less interesting to me than describing the mood that it evokes. like with the horse one, I knew the horse was there, but I saw the horse as one element in a cohesive whole, and it seemed more important to describe that whole (bizarre future game show) than to get into the specifics (human facing off against the horse and the horse is winning, glyphs in various languages on a board, etc.).
